Wednesday, November 20, 2013

November Meeting Notes


East Beach Writers’ Guild
November 14, 2013
Meeting Notes

Present:  Sally, Gina, Randi, Elizabeth, Shelley, Michael, Pat, Jenny, Mary Jac,        Juanita, Siobahn

Welcome and Introductions

New Business:

New Email address:  EBWG2013@aol.com

Meeting Times:  Some Evenings?   The majority were ok with alternating evening times with mornings.  We will try this at some point in 2014.

Upcoming meetings:

o   Friday, December 13: Editor  - We will hope to have author, Sheila Buff Skype in with information and tips on the critique process.  Google Sheila and Joe Buff – authors.

o   January 17: Critique session  - the first 5 people who email in their five pages of double spaced, Times New Roman, 1” margin publications before Jan 8th will be considered for the group critique.

o   February 22: Self-Publishing  - we hope to have an author speak to us on self-publishing.  Perhaps this will be an evening meeting.

o   March 21: Possible Road Trip to Virginia Festival of the Book  Charllottesville. 

o   April 18 (Good Friday…possible change): Critique Session

Toys for Tots:  Bring an unwrapped book to next meeting for donation to Toys for Tots

Starter Sentence:  This month’s starter sentence was, “The turkey was delicious but something tasted funny about the gravy.  Then all of a sudden…”  (See some of the submissions on our Facebook page and/or blog. – Send Randi your sentences completed if you’d like them included). rgklein@verizon.net.

 December Starter Sentence …”The tree we bought smelled great…”

A community service project was recommended…Organizing and cataloging the East Beach library in the clubhouse.  Randi volunteered to lead the project and many others volunteered to help.

 Today’s Program:  Best Writing Advice Ever Learned moderated by Shelley Perry.  Everyone was asked to bring a bit if writing advice they’ve found helpful or inspiring and we’ll share it.   

 Pat – (From a former professor) – Pay attention to the things others are disregarding.  And photos can help remind you of certain places / situations (smells, sounds, etc.)

Michael – Michael had a handout that was very helpful about watching the “Lard Factor” and having too many extra, unnecessary wording. 

Elizabeth – Enjoys observing children and what interests them in order to see what types of books they may like.  She watches and learns.

Sally – “Write every day.” And remember “POV – Point of View” – Think of the character with a movie camera on their head.  And, From Josip Novakovich’s “Writing Fiction Step by Step”:

On the topic of character motivation:  A character does not work in isolation. A wolf in a cage, away from its natural habitat, does not appear to be his natural self—the wolf is without will, has no motive to hunt or roam, and hence does not even look like a wolf but more like a beaten dog. A character in isolation, alone in a room, pretty soon becomes like a wolf in a cage—he becomes solipsistic and depressed. How many interesting stories have you read about highly motivated, exciting and excited characters who stay alone in a room? So don’t spend pages, as some inexperienced writers are wont to do, escorting your lonely character into ever deeper levels of self-consciousness and depression. Instead, take him out to a party or on a date or put him to work at a construction site or send him packing on a trip to some exotic place.

Randi – Sheila Buff told her the best piece of advice: “Ass in Chair” J

Mary Jac – A 74 year old friend told her “Watch your point of view – don’t have 3 different points of view expressed.  Watch your introductory phrases.  “Show don’t tell” and your first draft is just the beginning.”

Gina – “If you read good books, when you write, good books will come out of you.” – Natalie Goldberg

Jenny – Grammarly.com – advice on grammar mistakes and what to avoid.

HOW TO WRITE GOOD…

1.     Avoid alliteration always.

2.    Prepositions are not words to end sentences with.

3.    Avoid clichés like the plague. (They’re old hat.)

4.    Eschew ampersands & abbreviations. Etc.

5.    One should never generalize.

6.    Comparisons are as bad as clichés.

7.    Be more or less specific.

8.    No sentence fragments.

9.    Exaggeration is a billion times worse than understatement.

10.Parenthetical remarks (however relevant) are unnecessary.

11.  And always be sure to finish what

Courtesy of grammerly.com

Juanita – Consider “The Artists Way” a book that is a 12 week workshop toward better creativity.  Including, “morning pages” that encourage you to write every morning – a “mind dump” that creates space to think differently.

Shelley – Consider events like the one she went to at the Columbia Teachers College of Columbia University.  She heard professionals speak and learned a great deal of advice from children’s book authors.
See you at the next meeting, FRIDAY, DECEMBER 13TH – BRING A CHILDREN’S BOOK!

 

 

 

 

 

 

Friday, November 15, 2013

Thanksgiving Story

[Note: Many great "Starter Sentences" for November were shared by the group. Since many of us in the group have military connections, whether by active duty ourselves, our spouses and/or our children, this story by Pat Clark is published here to honor our military veterans and families.  May it remind all of us that there are thousands of American military men and women who are serving around the world away from their homes and loved ones, not only on Thanksgiving, but every day of the year. RGK]

Pat Clark

The turkey was delicious but something tasted funny about the gravy.  Then all of a sudden our surreal warzone, Thanksgiving dinner was interrupted by the distinctive, slow cycling rat-tat-tat of an AK-47 assault rifle followed by the louder, faster return fire of the M-16 from our sentry posted on the Southeast perimeter.   Instinctively, and before I could give the order, protective gear was donned and the soldiers of my unit were rushing to their pre-designated defensive positions behind the concrete fortified outer walls of our forward deployed compound.  We were the forward unit in the “surge” operation on the border between Afghanistan and Pakistan.  This type of harrasment tactics from the Taliban had become routine. 

“There was no way we were going to be left alone on a uniquely American holiday to enjoy this meal and some needed down time.” I thought, as I climbed the dark, narrow and very worn sandstone steps to my position on the second level of the compound.

As commander of this joint U.S. and Afghan unit, I always tried to find the best location possible to observe and direct operations.  Getting high to look down on the skirmish was always advantageous.

 As I was already taking fire, “Second deck is the best I’m going to get.” I said to myself.  “Shit, this is heavier than usual.  What are they thinking?”

“That was good turkey!” 

“Shit, what am I thinking?”

“You gotta hand it to Gen. Osbourne and the boys back at Bagram.” I thought as I crouched behind my cover wall, “While, most of them will be enjoying a nice hot turkey dinner in an air conditioned mess hall and even get a chance to watch the Lions-Packers game on Armed Forces TV, at least they made sure we have turkey.” 

 Through my earpod Cpl martin wisecracked “Lieutenant, I spilled my dinner on the floor when the excitement started.  You think they’ll fly up a replacement?”

 “Let’s keep focused guys.”  I spoke into my shoulder mike.  “These guys are serious.” 

 Then, trying to ease a little of the tension, I said, “If you’re still hungry after this, you can have the rest of mine, I only spilled the beans.”

A few days earlier the general and his staff thought it would be a good idea to flash-freeze and pre-package some turkey dinners and have them delivered to the forward units on Thanksgiving morning.  Pop them in the microwave for a few minutes and our guys would get some good old American comfort food on turkey day.  Along with our mail, the meals were delivered this morning via Blackhawk chopper with two Apache gunships flying air cover.

 “It was a nice gesture.” I thought. “But, I’m not sure they get it back at command.  This is a hellhole.  Hot turkey won’t make these guys feel any better about the where we are.”

Then at 30 deg. relative angle, about 40 meters out, I noticed motion and a definite rifle stock behind a small rock outcropping and some dessert bush.

 “I guess, considering that Gen. Osbourne wasn’t obligated to do anything for us out here, I really can’t complain about funny tasting gravy.” I thought.  “It was after all prepared in bulk.  Not like Mom’s kitchen back in Madison.”

I placed the target in sight, center mass, with my index finger lightly over the trigger.

 “Happy Thanksgiving.” I said softly.

Tuesday, November 5, 2013

November Meeting Reminder!

Next Guild Meeting
Thursday, November 14
9:00 AM
Bayfront Club Library

Bring your favorite piece of writing advice
 
Coffee will be provided,
but please bring your own mug!
 
 
Starter Sentence
 
"The turkey was delicious,
but something tasted funny about the gravy.
Then all of a sudden..."