Tuesday, December 24, 2013
Starter Sentence Success Story
Each month our group sends out a "starter sentence" and asks that members use that kernel of an idea to jump-start their muse and then write a short piece. At the same time in late November, the Virginian-Pilot asked for reader submissions on the topic of "gifts that didn't turn out the way they had hoped." Gina Buzby, multi-tasker that she is, combined the two things and came up with a story about one of her husband's childhood disappointments. She sent the story to the Pilot, and it got picked up! It appeared, ABOVE THE FOLD, AND WITH ILLUSTRATIONS, on the front page of the Daily Break on Saturday, December 21. You can read her original submission by clicking here. As editors are wont to do, they tweaked Gina's story a bit, but the essence of the story is there, and it all started with an EBWG starter sentence. Congratulations, Gina, on your publishing success!
Monday, December 16, 2013
The Critique Process
The Critique Process
Mary-Jac O’Daniel
December 13, 2013
December 13, 2013
1. The
critique process
- Let the author know if this is not your favorite type
of story.
- Write down your impressions as a reader.
- Try to give feedback on what could be changed.
- Give examples of improvements.
- Praise where praise is due.
- Never criticize the author personally.
- Critique as you would want to be critiqued.
2. Check
list
- Opening
- Conflict
- Plot
- Setting
- Characterization
- Dialogue
- Point of View
- Show versus tell
- Format of the text
J. Grammar
and spelling
· Conflict
- Is
it boring? Something needs to be happening. Conflict is "The mental
or moral struggle caused by incompatible desires and aims. That is the
kind of conflict that makes stories vitally alive." - Ben Bova in
"The Craft of Writing Science Fiction That Sells".
- Is
there emotional conflict WITHIN the main character? Between the main
characters? Emotional conflict is part of what gets readers interested.
For example: love vs. loyalty; greed vs. duty; fear vs. desire; revenge
vs. self-doubt.
- Are
there too many or not enough conflicts?
4. Is
there enough conflict between the characters? Is it expressed through action,
dialogue, attitudes, or values?
5. Every
scene needs to have a point!
· Setting
- Did
the author paint an adequate picture of the setting. Could you see the red
grape glistening in the sun?
- Along
those lines, was there too much description? Were there distracting
cliches?
3. If
the story takes place in the south, does the dialogue and actions of characters
fit the setting?
4. Is
the timing and order of events in the story consistent?
· Characterization
- Did
the people seem real?
- Were
the facts about the characters accurate and consistent?
3. Did
you get a good picture of the culture, historical period, location, and
occupation of the main character?
- Backstory:
Were you distracted by too much background information of a character at
one time? Did the author seem to dump a lot of information on the
background of a character in one or two long speeches, or did we learn
about that character here and there in smaller pieces?
· Dialogue
- Did
the words from the mouths of the people in the story seem consistent with
their personalities?
- Was
there too much or not enough dialogue, in your opinion? Usually writers
err on the side of not enough dialogue.
- Did
the dialogue seem easy to speak? Can you 'hear' it?
- In
an exchange of conversation, can you easily tell who is speaking if you
didn't have their names or gender attached to their sentences?
- Avoid
talking heads.
· Point of View
- Did
the story skip around between the first person or third person point of
view (POV)? Were the changes in POV signaled clearly?
- When
the POV changed, were you able to quickly sense who the new viewpoint was
from?
· Show versus tell
1. When
in the POV of a character, did the author describe what his/her senses showed,
e.g., sight, sound, smell, touch, taste? Or did the author just tell you the
dinner was very good?
2. Did
the author describe exactly how the people acted?
3. Were
there many instances of words such as "very", "much",
"really", "great", or "nice" when a more detailed
description would have been more colorful?
December Meeting Minutes
East Beach
Writer’s Guild
Minutes from the December 13, 2013 Meeting
Meeting called
to order at 9:15 at the home of Randi Klein.Minutes from the December 13, 2013 Meeting
Kudos of those
in attendance as follows:
o
Mary-Jac—Has
been writing/editing 30 minutes a day
o
Mike—The
proofs for his new release, The End of
Free Will, are in the mail! He has
been learning social media in order to promote. You’ll soon be able to order
your copy.
o
Pat—The
December starter sentence (be sure and read it…see link at the end of the
minutes) helped him move forward with his current WIP, so has put his new
project on hold while he returns to his original.
o
Randi—She
has self-published a short story “Grandpa’s Glasses” printed on canvas paper as
a Christmas gift for her granddaughter.
o
Sally—Showed
an advanced copy of Virginia is for
Mysteries, (to be released by Koehler Books on January 2, 2014). It includes her short story, “Best Friends
Help You Move the Body.” A book release
will be held January 11, 2014, at the East Beach Sandwich Company where 6 of
the 14 contributing authors will be in attendance to sign the book.
New
Business: Congratulations to Mike Owens
on his upcoming release!
Old Business:
o
Books
collected for the Toys for Tots are as follows:
Ø
The Screaming Staircase, a Lockwood & Co. adventure, by
Johathan Stroud;
Ø
The Very Nearly Honorable League of
Pirates, a Magic Marks
the Spot book by Caroline Carlson (according to the contributor, you CAN judge
a book by its title!);
Ø
Once Upon a Time, Y’all: Southern Origin
Stories “How Mister Turtle Got His Shell” and “Why The Mockingbird Has Many
Voices” by Lisa C. Ray
(accompanied by a wonderfully soft stuffed turtle);
Ø
A
Dr. Seuss Board Book collection which included “ABC The Amazing Alphabet Book”,
“I’ll Teach My Dog A Lot of Words”, “ The Alphabet Book”, and “Go, Dog. Go!”
Ø
Dr.
Seuss’s What Was I Scared Of?;
Ø
If You Give a Mouse a Cookie” by Laur
Numeroff;
Ø
Great
Illustrated Classic The Secret Garden by Frances Hogdson Burnett;
Ø
The Adventures of Huckleberry Finn by Mark Twain;
Ø
The Nutcracker by E. T. A Hoffman;
Ø
The Call of the Wild by Jack London.
These
books will be dropped off at the Toys for Tots bin at the East Beach Porch Walk
on Sunday. Thanks to the generous
donations of the EBWG members, there will be lots of smiling faces on Christmas
morning!
o
Library
Reorganization will take place in early 2014.
More information at the January meeting.
o
Upcoming
Meetings:
Ø
January
17 will be our first critique
session. Submit 5 pages in manuscript
format (which is double-spaced, Times New Roman 12 pt font, 1 inch margins) to EBWG2013@aol.com
(the guild email address) by January 8.
In the interest of time, only the first 5 submissions will be
critiqued. Once submitted, they will be
sent to all the members in the group. Then
we’ll each take our pens and, using things that MJ will teach as part of today’s program, critique the submissions. Then we’ll bring our critiques to the next
meeting and discuss what we thought and share with the author.
Ø
February
14 - Invited Guest speaker Jim Warren, published
author from Northern Virginia, who has written
multiple articles for professional magazines. He is also writing a novel
and has a concept for a children's book. His presentation will be about
writing and getting published in magazines. He is a retired
Navy Commander and Gina’s brother.
Ø
March
21—Invited guest speaker Shelia Buff, professional editor and published writer, http://sheilabuff.com/.
Ø
April
18—second quarter critique session.
Starter Sentence: This month’s starter sentence was…”The tree
we bought smelled great…”
o
Again,
some great submissions! You can read
them at http://eastbeachwritersguild.blogspot.com/p/starter-sentences.html
For
those of you who weren’t in attendance (or forgot them or didn’t do them yet or
wrote the wrong month…please send your musings to EBWG2013@aol.com so they can be posted and
shared with the world.
o
January
Starter Sentence: “The forecast calls
for snow…” So go on, get writing!
The meeting was
adjourned, and the program turned over to Mary-Jac O’Daniel who gave a fabulous
presentation on how to critique, and then we did a hands-on critique for
practice. The handout Mary-Jac provided is posted separately on this blog.
Respectfully
submitted,
Sally Parrott, writing as
Jayne Ormerod
Saturday, December 14, 2013
December Meeting
A big thank you to Mary Jac for her presentation on the Critique Process.
Notes on the meeting and critiquing will be posted soon.
Remember, "first come, first served" for critiques in January. Email your 5 pages (in manuscript form) to EBWG2013@aol.com.
Notes on the meeting and critiquing will be posted soon.
Remember, "first come, first served" for critiques in January. Email your 5 pages (in manuscript form) to EBWG2013@aol.com.
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